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最新六年高考英语满分作文及评析(04-10)  

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最新六年高考英语满分作文及评析(04-10)

——2010年高考英语作文试题点评(全国卷I)

英语作文即英语书面表达主要是考查考生综合运用英语进行书面表达的能力,是一项主观性试题。《考试大纲》指出,写作是英语听、说、读、写四项语言技能中不可分割的一个重要部分,更是语言生成能力的重要表现形式。该部分试题要求考生根据题示进行书面表达。考生应能:(1)准确使用语法和词汇。(2)使用一定的句型、词汇,清楚、连贯地表达自己的意思。

一、试题回顾分析

今年的英语高考作文(全国卷I)命题思路和前几年相比,变化并不大,仍然采用的是应用文的考查形式,是提纲类作文,体现了高考命题的稳定性。材料如下:

 

假设你是育才中学学生会主席,你校将举办一次英语演讲比赛(speech contest),想要邀请附近某大学外籍教授Smith女士来做评委,参考以下通知,给她写一封信:主题《人与自然》。时间:6月15号下午2点至五点。地点:501教室。参赛选手:10名学生。联系人李华电话:44876655。欢迎大家光临。

Dear Ms.Smith,

With best wishes.

Yours,

Lihua

 

题示材料已经在一定程度上规定了考生的表达思路,而且对考生的写作范围也作了比较明确的限定。但是,试题仍然具有一定的开放性,给各位考生留出了一定的自由发挥空间,有利于考生充分展示自己的英语书面表达能力。

 

这次英语作文试题还是采用了以往的书信形式。对于类似形式的英语作文,考生并不陌生,在以往的复习和模拟训练时,见过不少。因此,本次作文难度不算大。而且,试题中已经写好了开头和结尾,考生不必考虑和担心书信格式的问题,可以直接按照材料题示的有关内容进入主题,这有利于帮助考生增强信心,进行顺利答题。考生应该克服畏难情绪,因为英语作文没有唯一的固定标准答案,只要写得好,只要写得精彩,就能拿到比较高的分数。

二、把握评分标准

高考的评分原则以及评分标准是考生平常进行写作训练的指导原则,是考生在高考时进行写作的规范,也是高考阅卷老师评分给分的一个重要依据和标准。

(一)评分原则:

1、本题总分为25分,按5个档次给分。

2、评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。

3、词数少于80和多于120的,从总分中减去2分。

4、评分时应注意的主要内容为:内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性。

5、拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

2009高考英语满分作文

【全国卷I海南、宁夏】 ks5u

【试题回放】假定你是李华,正在英国接受英语培训,住在一户英国人家里。今天你的房东Mrs. Wilson 不在家,你准备外出,请给Mrs. Wilson 写一留言条,内容包括: Ks5u

1.外出购物 Ks5u

2.替房东还书 Ks5u

3.Tracy 来电话留言:1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)见面取消 Ks5u

2)此事已告知Susan Ks5u

3) 尽快回电 Ks5u

注意:1. 词数100左右; Ks5u

2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

Mrs. Wilson, Ks5u

I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change. Ks5u

Yours,

Li Hua

Ks5u

[名师点评] Ks5u

本文属于提纲式要点作文,是学生比较熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性,生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运用恰当、准确,各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要开门见山。

 

 

【北京卷】ks5u

【试题回放】情景作文

假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为响应绿化祖国的号召,你班四月十二日去郊区植树,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,介绍植树活动的全过程,给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。

注意:词数不少于60

提示词:郊区 suburbs

April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.

【名师点评】

本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文,与环保结合,立意较好。文章思路清晰,要点连贯,在语言的表达上选词新颖,同时运用了分词短语作状语等较好的句式表达。

【北京卷】ks5u

【试题回放】开放作文

请根据下面提示,写一篇短文,词数不少于50

In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.

What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it’s a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a better job, In my opinion, we don’t need to copy others’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.

【名师点评】

本文是开放性作文,要求考生把握好图画内容,发散表达。考生重点要看出这个人是卷发高鼻的外国人,要体会到西式刀叉对中式食物的矛盾性。行文结构十分明晰,同时句式使用得熟练而准确。

【江苏卷】ks5u

【试题回放】鼠标是计算机时代最佳的人机交互工具之一。它极大地方便了人们的计算机操作。但是,过分依赖鼠标的习惯也会带来一些不利影响。请你以鼠标为切入点,根据下表所提示的信息,用英语写一篇短文。

鼠标的必要性

     对多数人来说,操作计算机,上网冲浪……

鼠标的便捷性

点击、移动、插入、拷贝、删除……

编辑文本,搜索信息……

收发邮件,选购商品……

点播音乐,下载电影……

如果过分依赖鼠标……  (请考生结合自身感受,列举两到三点)

注意:

1.对所给要点逐一陈述,适当发挥,不要简单翻译。

2.词数150左右。开头已经写好,不计人总词数。

3.作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。

The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.

A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.

【名师点评】本文为提纲式说明文体裁,所选内容与我们生活相关,考生只要把所给要点逐条陈述,适度发挥,不要逐条翻译即可。文章说理清楚,语言流畅,句式表达多样,用词恰当、准确。不失为一篇满分作文。

2008高考英语满分作文

【全国卷】ks5u

【试题回放】假定你是李华,从小喜爱大熊猫(panda),一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她的母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封信:
1、 自我介绍;2、 祝贺苏琳生日;3、 感谢工作人员;4、 索取苏琳三岁生日照。
注意:1、词数100左右;2、可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;3、开头语已为你写好。
例文:
Dear Sir/Madam,
Greetings from China!
I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.
Yours truly,
Li Hua

【名师点评】本文写作的内容要点如下:

1.自我介绍;2.信息来源;3.祝贺生日;4.感谢照顾;5.索取照片;6.合适的结尾。

这封信格式正确,行文规范,描述有条不紊,称呼、正文中的开头及结尾、结束语均表达到位。文章行文活泼,感情真挚,语言表述准确,洋溢着作者因大熊猫得到精心照顾而对美方人员的感激之情,以及希望自己愿望成真,得到照片的希冀之情。长短句运用合理,结合了简单句和复合句,流畅自然,不露痕迹,的确是一篇佳作。

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英汉互译

好词

1.delighted adj.欣喜的,快乐的  2.express v.表达  3.give birth to v.产生,生育

好句

I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

我祝福它生日快乐并且对你们的辛勤工作表达我的感激之情,正是你们的努力工作让苏琳和它的父母在美国过着幸福和健康的生活。

评析:定语从句的使用。

 

【北京卷】ks5u

【试题回放】假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。

    注意: 词数不少于60.

    提示词: 游乐园   amusement park         垃圾箱   bin

Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.
     The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

We were tired but happy.

【名师点评】

    本情景作文的内容要点如下:1.讨论;2.爬山;3.检拾别人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。内容要点可用不同方式表达。本文覆盖了所有内容要点,较好地完成了试题规定的任务。其中,写作主题突出,详略得当,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇,而且有效的使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文机构紧凑。本文叙述清楚,描写细致,准确运用了很多富有表现力的词和句型,例如:“set off early”,“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等,将活动的情形很形象地描述了出来。

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英汉互译

好词

1 set off 出发 2. litter n.废弃物 3.respectively adv.分别地

好句

1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

在爬山时,我们享受着温暖的阳光和美丽的风景。

1.                 However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

然而,当我们登上山顶,被眼前的一幕惊呆了:瓶子和香蕉皮这样的废弃物到处都是。

评析:细节描写,生动形象。“shock”一词也用得生动传神。

 

【江苏卷】ks5u

【试题回放】实现有效的沟通,建立良好的人际关系,不仅要善于言表,更要学会倾听。请你根据下表中所提供的信息,写一篇题为 “Being a Good Listener” 的英文演讲稿。


为何倾听

表示尊重,增进理解,建立良好的人际关系

谁来倾听

家长倾听孩子

理解孩子,消除代沟,……

老师倾听学生

了解学生,满足需求,……

同学相互倾听

增进友谊,互帮互学,……

怎样倾听

(请考生联系自己拟定内容,列举两至三点。)


注意:

1、              对所给要点,逐一陈述,适当发挥,不要简单翻译。

2、              词数150左右。开头和结尾已经写好,不计入总词数。

3、              演讲稿中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。

Good afternoon, everyone.

The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.

Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.

Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.

Thank you for your listening!

【名师点评】

这是一篇感情真挚、热情洋溢的演讲稿,文中大量运用排比句型,不但准确流畅地表达出题目中所提供的信息,而且体现出作者熟练运用英语的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同结构的复合句式,将倾听的对象及其作用阐述得淋漓尽致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句议论应如何倾听,则更进一步地增强了这篇演说稿的说服力。

 

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英汉互译

好词

1.promote v .促进 2. interpersonal adj.人际的3. generation gap. 代沟

4. open-minded adj. 虚心的

好句

1.                 students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

同学之间应该互相倾听,这样他们可以互相学习和帮助,也会形成友谊。

评析:复杂句的组合,被动句的使用。

2.                 What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.

我想强调的是我们每个人都应该更多的倾听他人。

评析:复合句的使用。

 

【湖北卷】ks5u

【试题回放】假设你是卜曼宜,你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机,因有质量问题,要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点,用英文写一封电子邮件。

要点:1. 问题:手机不响铃,不能发短信;该产品已售完,无法更换;型号新,无配件,无法维修。 2. 要求:公司应尽快予以更换。

     注意:1. 词数为100左右;

           2. 参考词汇:配件—— spare part;

           3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好(不计入你所写词数);

           4.已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。

Dear Sir,

I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely yours,

Bu Manyi

【名师点评】

本文内容要点齐全,语言丰富,结构合理,如头两句说明了购买手机后发现故障的情况,中间部分说明了无法维修而必须让公司更换手机的原委,最后明确提出自己的要求,明白流畅,将题目所提出的要点全部表达清楚,较好的完成了任务。全文以一般过去时为基调,结合主动语态与被动语态,并使用了so, but, therefore 等连接词,使文章结构完整严密。固定短语,如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用,使文章的语言显得地道而精炼。

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英汉互译

好词

1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.绝望的3. consideration n.体谅

好句

To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

令我失望的是,他说因为在中国是新款手机,所以没有配件来修理。

评析:复杂句的组织; to my disappointment, 常用短语。

 

2007高考英语满分作文

【全国卷II】ks5u

【试题回放】

一家宾馆新开业,为吸引外国宾客,希望在互联网上进行宣传。请你用英语为其 写一篇文字介绍。主要内容包括:
1.地点:距白山入口处500米;
2.房间及价格:单人间(共20间),100元/天;双人间(共15间),150元/天;热水淋浴;3.餐饮:餐厅(中、西餐),咖啡厅(茶、咖啡);4.游泳池:全天免费开放; 5.欢迎预定。
注意:1.词数100左右,开头语已为你写好;2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!

  Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.

  500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides singleperson room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double  person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!

  Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.

【名师点评】

本文开门见山,首先点明了主旨。本文最大的特点是应用了很多比较复杂的句式,使文章比较出彩。开头使用了独立结构交代宾馆位置。which引导的非限制性定语从句的使用也很正确。总地来说,文章句式精炼,是篇不错的满分作文。  

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英汉互译

好词

 1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利

好句

All these services can bring great convenience to you and are

very enjoyable.所有这些服务都会给你带来便利,并且非常的愉快。

  评析:bring great convenience,带来便利。

 

【安徽卷】ks5u

【试题回放】

假如你是李华,美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物,该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信,假如你是李华,美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物,该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信,主要内容如下:

l 表示赞成。

l 提出你喜欢的栏目。

l 简要说明理由。

注意:

1. 词数100左右。

2. 新的开头和结尾已为你写好。

3. 适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

4. 参考栏目:栏目—column

Dear Mr. Green,

I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.

Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it’s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can’t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.

Well, I can’t list more. I really can’t wait to read that magazine!

Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

【名师点评】

这是一篇满分作文。由于这篇作文的出现,导致了安徽省今年的英语作文分数普遍偏低。仔细分析了这篇文章,写的的确是好,很地道的美式英语,一些词语的大胆使用,让人不得不猜测此人或者是家人可能有过国外生活的经历,否则这么地道标准的英语,可不是一朝一夕所能写出来的。

比如说:my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy的大胆运用,list, can't wait to 简直是perfect! 况且文章中没有一个错误,不管是书写还是语法。英语能够学到这种程度,不可谓不让人佩服。

 

【江苏卷】ks5u

【试题回放】2007年4月29日上午10点到11点,全国亿万学生阳光体育活动在各地大中小学校同时进行,江苏省1,100万学生积极参与了这项活动。

教育部倡导学生:

u 每天锻炼一小时

u 健康工作五十年

u 幸福生活一辈子

请你根据以上提示,用英语准备一份发言稿,向同学们讲述一下阳光体育活动的有关情况,并就高三学生是否需要每天花一小时锻炼,谈谈你的看法及理由。

注意:

1、  发言稿应包括以上所有信息,要有适当发挥。

2、  词数:120左右。发言稿的开头和结尾已经写好,不计入总词数。

3、  参考词汇:阳光体育活动——a national student sports program;

            教育部——the Ministry of Education

Good afternoon, everyone,
  The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10:00a.m.~11:00a.m.on April 29,2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.
  The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.
  In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!
  Thank you!
【名师点评】
  本文的结构十分明晰,同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段,前两段叙述,后一段发表观点,典型的作文结构。在句式使用上,作者用法多样,使用了独立结构和虚拟语气,十分出彩。复杂的句式是本文的特点之一。
  积累卡片
  好词1.wage v.发动2.aim v.瞄准3. advocate v.提倡
  好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.
  教育部提倡我们每天做一个小时的运动,能够健康地活50年。
  评析:advocate,其后接虚拟语气,可以省略情态动词。
  2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records.
  如果我们不进行运动,我们的学习成绩就不会很好。
  评析:虚拟语气。

 

【重庆卷】ks5u

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据报道,7岁的美国女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后处于极度的痛苦之中,美国抗癌协会(ACS)决定,每当Amy收到一封慰问信,就给她增加3美分的治疗款。

假如你是新华中学的学生李华,请你用英文给Amy写一封慰问信,主要内容包括:

  自我介绍

  得知的情况

  表示鼓励

  打算为她做什么

  祝她早日康复

注意:

1. 信的格式已为你写好

2. 信中不得出现你的真实情况。

3. 词数100左右。

4. 请在答题卡上作答。

Dear Amy,

  I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.

                                                                 Yours,

                                                                  Li Hua

 

 

[名师点评]

  本文依照要求,涵盖了所有要点。文章使用了高中常见的句式,如Im sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等,都比较好。作者对定语从句的使用恰到好处地修饰了文章,行文自然而通顺,值得学习。

  积累卡片

  好词1.realize v.意识到2.promise v.允诺3.donate v.捐赠

  好句1. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.

  我很遗憾地得知你身患肺癌,给你带来了巨大的痛苦。

  好处:which引导限制性定语从句。

  2. So, stand up and fight against the disease!

  因此,坚强地与疾病做斗争吧!

  好处:掷地有声,语言准确。

2006高考英语满分作文

【全国卷I】ks5u
【试题回放】
假定你是李华,亚洲冬季运动会将在你居住的地方举办,现正在招募志愿者,你希望成为其中一员。请按要求用英文给组委会写一封信。内容应包括:1.个人情况:年龄,性别,学历 2.个人条件:英语好,爱好体育,善于交际,乐于助人,熟悉本地情况 3.承诺:提供最佳服务
注意:词数100左右,开头语已为你写好;可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;生词:申请—apply (v. ), application (n.),志愿者—volunteer
Dear Sir / Madam:

   I was quite excited when I heard the Asian Winter Games will be held in the city I live. My name is Li Hua. I am an 18-year-old boy student in a senior middle school. And I want to be a volunteer for the games. I like English and sports very much. I like making friends and I am ready to help others. I can be a good interpreter in every sports during the time. Hope the games will be a great success. Hope I will be chosen to be one.

Yours faithfully,

 Li Hua

[名师点评]

    这篇文章写得非常流畅,把握了所有要点,同时以“我”为中心,详细说明了自己对志愿者工作的结合,以此来表达自己的决心。由于用词恰当,这种表现就比较充分,具备一定的说服力。词汇和语句的运用也不错。

 

[全国卷II] ks5u

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 假定你是李华。应英国朋友Bob的要求, 写一封短信介绍你校图书馆的基本情况。内容须包括下面两幅图中的相关信息。 

注意:

1、字数100左右

2、可以适当增减细节,以使行文连贯

3、开头语已为你写好

Dear Bob,

Thank you for your last letter asking about our library. Our library locates between the teaching building and our garden. The shape of it seems to be a book to welcome our students. it’s open from Monday to Friday ,and we can borrow the books from 9:00a.m. to 7:00p.m.

There are many books available in our library ,dealing with almost every subject. Not only the books, but also the magazines can be read here. You may borrow up to five books at a time, and keep them for at most ten days.

 Due to the library , we are offered a place to gain as much knowledge as we can. If you are interested in it, welcome to our school, and I’ll show you around.

                                                 Yours sincerely,

                                                   Li hua

[名师点评]

本文最大的特点是描绘仔细而生动,意思表达十分契合。文章以短句为主,兼以长句读起来轻快。文章的体系结构也是常用的三段式,作者极力推荐自己的图书馆,这么好的图书馆怎么不打动他的外国朋友呢?

 
【安徽卷】ks5u
【试题回放】 
假设你是李华,作为选派的交流学生在美国某中学学习了一年,寄住在Mr. Brown家里,刚回到国内。回国后,你发现自己的一本英语词典遗忘在他家,因此给他写了一封信,请他帮助寄回词典。信的主要内容如下: 
感谢在美国期间他所提供的帮助 
一本英语词典忘记带回 
词典是美国老师送的,非常珍贵 
词典很可能丢在卧室的书架上 
邮资自己付 
注意: 
1、词数100左右;信的开头和结尾已为你写好。 
2、可适当增加细节,使行文连贯 
2、参考词汇:邮资-postage 
Dear Mr. Brown, 
     I have been back, and write this letter to show my thanks. As the exchange student, you make me feel warm. Welcome to my country ,I’ll show you around in turn.
    However , there exists a problem that I have left my dictionary at  your home. I like it very much , for it was a precious gift from my teacher who comes from the U.S. I guess that my book may stay on your shelf in the bedroom .
Do you mind if you send my dictionary to me? I will pay for the postage and I’ll be very grateful if you show your warmness again.
 I’m eager to receive your reply.
                                            Yours,
                                             Li hua 
[名师点评]
本文作为信件,首先其格式是正确的。既然是应用文,那么文章的意图就要明确表示出来,本文在表达作者写作意图的时候,情真意切,用词委婉而合理。文章不但使用了定语从句,还采用了疑问句,让句式变化而不呆板。
 
【重庆卷】ks5u
【试题回放】
加拿大高中生David在互联网Internet上登出启事notice,希望结识一位中国朋友,以便学习中国的语言,文化culture。 
假设你是李华,请在看到这则启事后,用英文给David发一封电子邮件,主要内容包括: 
你怎样得知David的愿望 
你愿意成为他的朋友 
你打算如何帮助他 
你盼望他的回复 
注意: 
1、电子邮件的格式已为你写好 
2、字数:100词左右 
3、在答题卡上作答 

   Dear David,

I’m a student from China and have noticed your requirement on line. You would like to search for a Chinese friend to help you get to know China and its culture. Maybe I’m your good choice.

    China is a country that has a long history of 5,000 years. Not only our history ,but also our culture is the access to understand us better.

    There are so much that I want to know, if you are interested. I’ll be looking forward to your reply. I’ll show you around our great China if you come to China.

                                                             Yours sincerely ,

                                                              Li hua

[名师点评]

本文的语言非常流畅,我们可以看到,本文虽没有华丽的辞藻,但是语言的组织和层次感很强。同时连词的使用,如not only, but also ,让文章的重点突出,同时也起到了强调和吸引注意的目的。

 

 

2005高考英语满分作文

[全国卷I] ks5u

【试题回放】

假定你是李华,正是英国牛津参加短期语言培训,计划星期天去伦敦旅游。互联网上一则广告引起了你的注意,但一些具体信息不明确(箭头所指内容)。请给该旅行社发一封电子邮件,询问有关情况。

注意:1.词数100左右,信的格式已为你写好。

2.可根据内容要点适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

3.参考词汇:牛津——Oxford    费用——fee



 

 

 

 

 

 

Dear Sir/Madame,

I’m writing for more information about the day tour to London.

As a student at Oxford University, I’d like to know if you have any special price for students. As for the money you charge, does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed? What about lunch? Is it included? Or do I need to bring along my own food?

    How long will the tour last? Since I need to prepare my lessons for the nest day, I’d like to know the time to return. Besides, is there any time for shopping? I really want to have a look at the big stores in London.

Yours,

Li Hua

[名师点评]

本文是根据画面的提示来写一封电子邮件。作者在文章中首先把握了全部的要点,叙述较为完整;其次,作者运用一些过渡句和衔接词将文章串联,意思连贯。文章中采用了第一人称和一般现在时,这是值得肯定的地方。

[全国卷Ⅲ](四川、云南、陕西等地区用)ks5u

【试题回放】假设你是李华,最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论北京动物园是否应迁出市区。以下是你所在班级讨论的情况。请你给该报写一封信,反映讨论结果。


赞成迁出:

反对迁出:

1.游客多,交通堵塞

2.郊区环境好

1.建于1906年,中外闻名

2.搬迁易造成动物死亡


注意:1.词数100字左右,信的开头已为你写好。

          2.可根据内容要点适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

    3.参考词汇: 郊区—suburb

Dear Editor ,

    Recently ,in our class there has been a heated discussion about whether the Beijing Zoo should be moved out of the city . Some of my classmates are in favor of the move .They say large crowds of tourists to the zoo will result in traffic jams .They also say that once moved ,animals will have more space and better living conditions in the suburbs .However ,other students are against the idea ,saying that the Beijing Zoo, built in 1906 ,has a history of 100 years ,and is well –known at home and abroad .So it should remain where it is .What’s more ,moving may cause the death of some animals .To move or not ,this is a big decision which has to be made by people in Beijing.

                                                         Yours truly,

                                                              Li Hua

[名师点评]

这篇文章写得还是比较精彩的。要点表达得完整而准确,清楚展示了主题。先提出了文章的主题,进而列出了赞成的观点及其相关的理由,同时在其后又给出了反面的观点,论据十分充足。文章结构严谨,前后连贯。

 

 

 

 

【北京卷】ks5u

【试题回放】

第一节情景作文(20分)
美国中学生jeff将要来你所在的红星中学学习中文,经协商安排住在你家。假设你是李华,请给Jeff写一封信,按照下图顺序介绍他来中国后的生活安排。
注意:1. 信的开头已为你写好。

2.词数不少于60。

Dear Jeff,

    I’m Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School. I’m very happy to learn that you’re going to stay with my family while you’re in Beijing.

    While you are here, we’ll provide you with a room of your own with a bed, a desk, a couple of chairs and a TV. You’ll also have your own bathroom. Our school is quite close to our home, so we could go to school together by bike. At noon we’ll eat at the school dining hall. I’m sure you’ll like the delicious Chinese food there, and enjoy talking with friends over lunch. Classes in our school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon. You can then join other students in playing ball games or swimming. It’ll be a lot of fun.

    If you have any questions or requests, please let me know. We’ll try our best to make your stay here in Beijing a pleasant experience.

Best wishes,

                                                            Li Hua

[名师点评]

这篇文章的特点还是比较清晰的,第一,作者根据图画将文章的要点概括完整,内容充实而丰富,结构紧凑,有层次感;第二,本文没有采用华丽的辞藻,但用词十分恰当,段落过渡自然,令人耳目一新。

【北京卷】ks5u

【试题回放】开放作文

请根据下面提示,写一篇短文。词数不少于50。

In your English class, the teacher shows this picture of a little boy booking into a mirror, and asks the class to discuss it. Your classmates have different understandings.

Look at the picture carefully and tell the class how you understand the picture. Write what you would say on the next page.

We can see in the picture a little boy standing in front of a mirror. He’s letting his imagination fly. What he sees in the mirror is not his physical self but what he will be like in twenty years. Although he is small and short now, he believes he will grow up to be a tall and strong young man like Yao Ming, who he admires. I think this picture tries to tell us that we should always look into the future with hope and confidence.

[名师点评]

  本文写得很精彩,虽然短小,但却意味深长。同时本文最大的特点就是想象力十分丰富,文章有血有肉,无论是长短句的搭配,还是从句的使用,在短小的文章中都显得十分亮丽。语言方面也很精彩。

2004高考英语满分作文

【全国卷I】ks5u

【试题回放】

假设你是李华,你在报上看到北京电视台今年七月将举办外国人“学中文,唱中文歌”才艺大赛。你的美国朋友Peter正在北京一所大学学中文,你觉得他应去试一试。请按以下要点给他写信告知此事,并表示可以提供帮助。

比赛时间:7 月18日 。报名时间:截止到6月30日。报名地点:北京电视台

注意:1.词数:100左右 2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯 3.参考词汇:才艺大赛—talent show

Dear Peter,

    I read in a newspaper today that a “Learn Chinese, Sing Chinese Songs” Foreigners’ Talent Show will be held in Beijing Television Station on July 18. I know you like singing, and you are in Beijing during that period. I think this is a good chance for you to show your singing talent, and how well you’ve learned Chinese. If you would like to try, you' U have to go to the TV station to sign up before the end of June. If there is anything I can do for you, I would be more than glad to help.

Yours,

Li Hua

[名师点评]

  从整体上说,本文书写得简洁明快。语言简单平实,要点囊括齐全,结构完整。本文的主要特点是让步状语从句的使用,最后两句话,采用了if引导的让步状语从句,结合将来时使用。

 

【全国卷II】ks5u

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假设你是李华,加拿大一所学校将于今年暑假组织学生来你校访问。其间,Andy Smith将借住你家。请你代表全家写信给Andy,欢迎他的到来,并告知有关事宜。信的要点如下:

1.     上午:学校活动2.下午:游览市区3. 晚上:看电视,玩游戏,聊天

注意:1. 词数:100左右2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯3. 参考词汇:安排arrange

Dear Andy,

   I’m so glad that you’ll be here with me and my family for the summer holiday. I’m writing to express our warm welcome and introduce the activities during your stay here.

In the morning ,some activities at school will be arranged. You’ll visit our classrooms, reading rooms, labs, and so on. We’ll take this opportunity to exchange our views, talking about school life, and so on.

In the afternoon, you can tour around the city. And I’ll act as your tour guide. Our city has changed a lot and takes on a new look. You can see what is our city like with your own eyes.

At night , we can watch TV, play games and talk about what we’re interested in. I’m sure you’ll enjoy yourself. I’m looking forward to your coming.

                                                          Yours sincerely,

                                                          Li hua

[名师点评]

本文行文自然流畅,文章要点齐全,意思表达真切。详略得当,重点突出。从语言使用的角度来说,不但使用了一些生动的动词,准确的名词,同时为了使本文串联自然,又使用了时间状语为连接词,将文章按照时间顺序叙述完整。

 


[浙江卷] ks5u
【试题回放】

假设你是李越,你的加拿大笔友Steve来信说,他和他的一些同学正在学中文,请你推荐两本学中文的词典.根据下表提供的信息,请你给他写一封回信.

 

英汉/汉英词典

新华字典

收词(字)

18,000(英语)

20,000(汉语)

10,000

价格

52元

11元

特点

大量例子、用法说明,适合初学者

中国最常用的汉语字典

 

参考词汇:

 · 推荐 recommend (V.)

 · 英汉/汉英词典 The English-Chinese Chinese-English Dictionary (ECCED)

 · 新华字典 Xinhua Dictionary (XD)

Dear Steve,

I’m so pleased to learn that you and your classmates are learning Chinese.

I’d like to recommend the following two dictionaries.

The English-Chinese/Chinese-English Dictionary is really a good one for beginners. It has 18,000 English words and 20,000 Chinese words. Besides plenty of examples, it has many notes telling you bow to use a word. Xinhua dictionary is the most popular Chinese dictionary , and it has a vocabulary of 10,000 words. It may also be useful to some advanced learners of Chinese. Of the two, ECCED is the more expensive, costing 52 yuan, and XD costs 11 yuan.

Please let me know if you want me to buy these dictionaries.

Yours,

Li Yue

[名师点评]本文要完成的是书信的主要部分,因此不需要注意格式,但是不能遗漏要点。本文要点齐全,内容完整,详略得到。介绍的时候,层次清晰,逐一举例。文章流畅而连贯。有很多关于词汇和字典的表述,值得我们积累。


 
[广东卷] ks5u


【试题回放】假设你是下图的李华。请根据图画所提供的信息,写一篇英语作文,描述昨天晚上邻居看足球赛影响你学习的情况,并描写你随后与邻居交涉的过程(如:你向邻居提出要求,对方向你表示歉意等。)

注意:1. 词数:80—120

2. 可以编写对话或其它叙述方式描写你与邻居的交涉过程

About 9 o'clock last night, I was doing my homework. Suddenly I heard my neighbor shouting and laughing loudly. He was watching a football game on TV. I couldn't go on studying and became impatient. I covered my ears, trying to keep the noises out, but failed. So I had to go my neighbor.

I knocked at his door and said," Good evening, Mr. Yang! Could you please turn down your TV a bit? I am doing my homework.'

 “Oh, I'm really sorry to have disturbed you. We'll do as you say.” My neighbor said politely.

“Thank you very much..” I said and went back to continue my study.

[名师点评]

这篇文章从整体上来看,内容完整,要点齐全。在准确领悟题意的基础上,用平实的语言,将文章娓娓道来,连贯而流畅。句式搭配长短结合。文章对对话的描写,很生动,让人有种身临其境的感觉。

 

【英语各档次的给分范围和要求】

第五档(很好);(21-25分)

1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

2. 覆盖所有内容要点。

3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。

4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误,但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。

5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。

6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。

第四档(好):(16-20分)

1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

2. 虽漏掉1、2个次重点,但覆盖所有主要内容。

3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

4. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确,些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。

5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。

6. 达到了预期的写作目的。ks5u

第三档(适当):(11-15分)

1. 基本完成了试题规定的任务。

2. 虽漏掉一些内容,但覆盖所有主要内容。

3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,但不影响理解。

5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯。

6. 整体而言,基本达到了预期的写作目的。

第二档(较差):(6-10分)

1. 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

2. 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容,写了一些无关内容。

3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解。

5. 较少使用语句间的连接成分,内容缺少连贯性。

6. 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。

第一档(差):(1-5分)

1. 未完成试题规定的任务。

2. 明显遗漏主要内容,写了一些无关内容,原因可能是未理解试题要求。

3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

4. 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响对写作内容的理解。

5. 缺乏语句间的连接成分,内容不连贯。

6. 信息未能传达给读者。

不得分:(0分)

 

 

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